A Short Film Screenplay

writers-block-jason-rekulak_mediumThis is a short film that I wrote a little while ago. One night I couldn’t sleep and had the urge to write something, with the aid of a little book called The Writers Block I found a concept to write about and turned it into a short film. I kind of cheated…you’re meant to open it to a random page and write whatever it tells you to, I flicked through until I found one I liked!

I eventually opened to a page that said “write about the journey of a five pound note as it passes through the possession of five different people”. Just as I was about to go straight past it and look for something else I thought ‘actually, that could be really interesting.

A short film I had watched just a few weeks prior to writing this kind of reminded me of the concept, it’s called The Black Balloon. It was screened at the Future Shorts Festival that Coventry University hosted before Christmas. In it this black balloon that appears to have a life of its own attaches itself to various different people, giving us a brief insight into their lives. I thought the idea of exploring several characters and just seeing a snippet of their lives was a really interesting one, and set about planning my characters.

The characters are all very different, some more realistic and relatable than others, all of varying ages. It’s set in a small community, and there’s an obvious closeness between all the characters who somehow manage to gain possession of the same five pound note through various transactions. I decided to avoid hinting too much at the background of each character, just dip into their lives very briefly and look at it from the present…so it’s ambiguous as to their backgrounds and what led them to where they are.

I’m pretty happy with it, although I’m thinking of scrapping the last two characters and maybe changing them for something more interesting but I’m undecided at the moment! This is a second or third draft, I edited some parts last night (albeit around midnight so I probably wasn’t thinking straight!) and will no doubt do another couple of edits before I’m completely happy with it.

Linked it as a PDF because the format goes all out of whack if I paste it in to the post!

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14 thoughts on “A Short Film Screenplay

  1. I enjoyed reading your script, and I love the idea. One thing though, with a script, lines like ‘All ingredients for her romantic meal’ and ‘It used to be a nightclub, but he uses it to run his business; dealing women and drugs’ need to be written in such a way that the audience will actually be able to see it. So perhaps you would describe an old nightclub sign over the door or some other means of communicating this to the audience. Or put it in voiceover. Do you know what I mean? It’s not a criticism, I like the piece, just trying to help out πŸ˜€

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    1. Yeah I get what you mean, you have to be careful though, unless you’re writing to direct, because producers and directors don’t take to scripts that do their job, if you know what I mean…so camera angles, directions or visuals should be kept to a minimum. Not that I’m sending this to a producer mind! lol I see what you mean though! It still needs some work,
      This is literally the, I think second, draft…I knocked it out about 3 or 4 months ago and had forgotten it until last night! It was just sat there in my documents looking lonely!

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      1. haha no, although chances are if ever this became a film I’d be making it…since I doubt sending it off would be successful xD no intention to make it mind

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  2. What is it with people posting scripts today (fifth!), I will save it and read at the weekend when I am off I promise πŸ˜€

    I am going to post a script, gonna make it long and ask people specific questions about it mwahahaha xD

    I do like the concept you have come up with though and would like to see some interesting characters when I read it πŸ˜€

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    1. I’ve not seen any other scripts posted lol, you dont have to read it haha and it’s only 6 pages xD I like to think they’re interesting…I hope they are! I like the first two best…but just because I’m really happy with the dialogue

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    2. I’m not asking people to read/judge/give feedback but cool xD I love the dialoge between the first two characters..it’s the one I worked hardest on. Tbf my better script was coursework, but I dont want to post that again and confuse the lecturers marking my work xD

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  3. I instantly heard Jez’s voice off peepshow for the role of Tom πŸ˜€
    ‘She’s frail and very pale’ #SadRhymes 😦

    It was good. I think the first one was the best, but they were all pretty good πŸ˜€

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    1. I’ve no idea who that is haha! I hate Tom, he’s such a dick! yeah I like the first best…I think I worked hardest on that and then kind of knocked the rest out quickly xD It will get a re-write when I can be bothered haha
      Thanks πŸ˜€

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